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So much turmoil
and so much pain;
this love is like
walking in the rain.

I dreamt that you
finally looked my way.
You will love me-
just not today.
I had the first and second verse listed as separate poems originally, but :iconlex-xiv: thought they sounded better together. So that's how you get it.
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:iconsephiroththepure:
Beautiful piece. You should do rhyming schemes more often, you're good at them.
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BlueSilverUU Aug 28, 2009
I'm glad I got them together, this is marvelous!
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:iconim-not-good-at-names:
I am always amazed by a writer who can create such emotion in short blurbs like this.
I really like because of just that, the emotion that you created so quickly but so clearly.
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:icongodalavita:
put across really well in so few words, well done!
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IIIXII Aug 17, 2009
This is BRILLIANT.
The last line was perfect.
But the part that was oh so true for me was

"this love is like
walking in the rain."

:D
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jesusroxgirl Aug 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow, i love this! :love: i can so relate....

oh a side note, would you consider joining ~dAWriterStrike? we're a club for those writers who feel dA isn't giving the respect they deserve. just thought i'd ask :hug:
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XemmyPuppy Aug 15, 2009  Student General Artist
XD Wow. I'll look into it; graci.
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jesusroxgirl Aug 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
not a prob :) it's a new group, but we're hoping to get it off its feet :hug:
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