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So much turmoil
and so much pain;
this love is like
walking in the rain.

I dreamt that you
finally looked my way.
You will love me-
just not today.

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I had the first and second verse listed as separate poems originally, but :iconlex-xiv: thought they sounded better together. So that's how you get it.

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:iconsephiroththepure:
Beautiful piece. You should do rhyming schemes more often, you're good at them.
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:iconbluesilveruu:
I'm glad I got them together, this is marvelous!
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:iconim-not-good-at-names:
~im-not-good-at-names Aug 23, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I am always amazed by a writer who can create such emotion in short blurbs like this.
I really like because of just that, the emotion that you created so quickly but so clearly.
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:icongodalavita:
put across really well in so few words, well done!
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:iconiiixii:
This is BRILLIANT.
The last line was perfect.
But the part that was oh so true for me was

"this love is like
walking in the rain."

:D
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~jesusroxgirl Aug 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
oh wow, i love this! :love: i can so relate....

oh a side note, would you consider joining ~dAWriterStrike? we're a club for those writers who feel dA isn't giving the respect they deserve. just thought i'd ask :hug:
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~XemmyPuppy Aug 15, 2009  Student General Artist
XD Wow. I'll look into it; graci.
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~jesusroxgirl Aug 15, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
not a prob :) it's a new group, but we're hoping to get it off its feet :hug:
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